Trying to fall asleep Bam
Thunder strike. Then a Tsunami happened. Water Smashing through my window so I Quickly ran outside in my
orange Swan
pyjamas. Water was up to my neck so I
swam to find somewhere safe. Finally tall building so I staying there for the night. I woke up hungry nothing but a dead so I ate it. I had to move out or I would starve. So I jumped out the window but I looked and the water was gone and I killed myself
silence.
Good start but your story is bit confusing to me. Also You forgot to add a word after but a dead. I think you might want make the ending better. For example you might want to say I killed my self in silence. Otherwise it's a good start.
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